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文章标题:致命诱惑之惊天大案(二)作者:ying13141819
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在这一节故事里,主要叙述了豹哥一伙人行凶后离去,留下强哥和两个马仔在轿车下面安装了定时炸弹然后才离去。大约过了一小时,一个骑着摩托车的路人发现了他们的尸体,立即给怀音派出所挂了报案电话,接电话的是小宋,小宋听了就吓瘫了,一旁的小李问了情况,立即飞奔上楼向周副指导员报告,周副指导员再次联系报案人核实了情况。小说采取剧本场景的形式演绎故事,但文体不够规范,轻重缓急处理也不够妥当,比如:这么紧急的情况下,还穿插进给小赵介绍对象的情节、描述周副指导员办公室的摆设......让人看了很不舒服。还有一节里内容太少,可读性就很弱了。期待下节能够丰满、提高!
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